I posted the below excerpt on a prompt #neardeathexperiences , in a writers group on Facebook because the prompt reminded me of this excerpt from The Child of Heaven, my first completed manuscript. I may or may not publish it, soon. I need your opinion. Would you like to hear what happens before and after this excerpt? Tell me, please. I value your opinion. Thank you. 😍😍
(PS. only about 500 words. Like you, I don’t like very long posts, in small print.)
Leila opened her eyes to a rosy haze. Stretched out beneath a bizarre blush of dawn, she could hear the echo of gentle waves coming from nearby. Her hands touched the smooth surface that felt like fine sand. She blinked several times and looked in the direction of the rhythmic hum. A vast beach bordering a sea seemed to expand infinitely. The turquoise-coloured sea met with the cerise sky far on the horizon. She sat up and looked behind her. She could make out the soft curves of rose-tinted hills encompassing the beach in the distance. As her eyes adjusted to the surroundings, she became aware that everything within her sight was dipped in a different shade of pink.
“Ton sur ton pink,” she mumbled.
Leila rose unsteadily and felt dizzy. Trying to regain her balance, she walked a few steps. She stopped and looked around again. Not a single living creature seemed to be in sight; not a single tree, the odd bird or even an insect.
‘Where am I?’ she thought, uneasily. ‘Am I dead and is this heaven?’
Leila walked towards the sea and dipped her hand in the water. It felt cool. She tasted her wet finger. It was salty. The waves rolled over her feet as she walked along the edge. It felt good. A bright ball of crimson light in the sky sent its rays to the sea, forming sparkling, spiral beams on the water. Everything seemed peaceful and comforting, yet she felt strange and lonely. She knew she was in a different place. In spite of the great calm surrounding her, uneasiness took over her soul. Leila stepped out of the sea and sat on the pink sand. While trying to debate her circumstances, she could feel the surge of panic rising in her chest.
She saw a figure approaching her from the direction of the hills and awaited in uncertainty. As the figure moved closer, she could make out the stature of a very tall, slim man, clad in a tight-fitting black outfit. The bald headed man with piercing turquoise eyes, stood grandly by Leila and said, “Hi, Leila, I’m Alem, and I am here to welcome you to Leia.”
“Leia, where is Leia? How did I get here? “
“Leia is a planet in the constellation of Libra, rather far from planet Earth. It is also called the pink planet because we have a crimson sun.”
“You mean you abducted me here from planet Earth?”
“No, Leila, we did not abduct you. You came here on your own free will. “
“How far is it from Earth?”
“In human terms, it’s more than twenty light-years away, but we don’t measure distances in those terms. Your measurements for distance and time are of no significance to us. We have different abilities to transport ourselves in space.”
“I’m not sure I totally believe you! Why would I want to go through such an ordeal?”
“You are probably much dazed and tired, but you will remember soon. We will try to make you as comfortable as possible. Let me take you to our guest quarters where you can rest and recover from your trip. “
The Child of Heaven ©2012 ©Sebnem E. Sanders
Part II Life on Leia